“Love”. Out of all the words in the English dictionary, this is what you give me?? No, I don’t object. I love love. If that makes sense. What’s funny is, the first thing I thought of was a quote I read from Lori Handeland (yeah, I know, who quotes her?? Right.):
“Love is irrelevant.”
“Love is everything.”
And I think if that doesn’t sum it up…
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I can hear him breathe and the sound is like the ocean to me; as close as my own heartbeat. I wonder if he’ll hate me when I’m gone, or if he’ll love me more when so much time has passed that all he can remember are the perfect moments. He won’t remember in twenty years that I left him. Only that I was there.
It’s not easy. Matters of the soul never are, but this time the pain leaves me frozen inside. That last moment burns in my memory.
I brush my fingertips across his forehead and slip away.
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I “love” this one. Not to be a critic (and it’s only because I think you’re writing is brilliant) but that last line caught a little, didn’t quite fit, though I see why you have it. I think you would do better to imply it as you usually do, rather than to say it outright. But it’s true…
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I was kind of thinking that too, but I was verging on the edge of exhaustion at the time, aye. I think I’ll go back and revise some when I have time. Thank you!
I won’t go into all the detail of my reaction, but I will tell you that I have a very strong emotional reaction every time I read your piece. That’s what good writing does, right? It evokes emotion, whether you want to feel it or not. Great work!
Powerful piece. I read the original version and it was good but the revision packs even more of a punch.
Hi, nice post. I have been thinking about this issue,so thanks for posting. I will certainly be subscribing to your blog.
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